The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Graph
illustrated above shows the Add an article
The graph
birth
statistic of people
who born
in Add a missing verb
were born
Autralia
and individuals who do not in 3 different areas Correct your spelling
Australia
such
as cities, towns and rural at the time interval from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
, percentage
of Correct article usage
the percentage
people
who born
in Add a missing verb
were born
urbanized
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the urbanized
area
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areas
has
remained Unnecessary verb
apply
same
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the same
at
the given period, Change preposition
in
in contrast
, there is slight
decreasing trend Correct article usage
a slight
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that occured
occured
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occurred
on
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in
birth
rate of towns. Even more, Add an article
the birth
birth
rate Add an article
the birth
a birth
of
rural area Change preposition
in
are
has been significantly reduced over the 15 years.
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apply
Firstly
, portion
of Add an article
a portion
the portion
people
born in cities was preserved whose percentage
was the highest at
1995 and Change preposition
in
also
at
2010, Change preposition
in
however
, there is noticeable increment was observed that percentage
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the percentage
was
increased by 20% in 2010 compared to data in 1995 both Unnecessary verb
apply
birth
of in
and outside Change preposition
apply
Autralia
.
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Australia
On the other hand
, number
of Change the article
the number
people
born in villagies
has decreased by at least 5% in all categories at the given time period. Even Correct your spelling
villages
village
tough
, Correct your spelling
though
this
change is relatively tiny when it is compared to decline
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the decline
of
Change preposition
in
percentage
of Add an article
the percentage
birth
in rural ares
. Correct your spelling
areas
Birth
rate Add an article
The birth
A birth
of
rural Change preposition
in
area
in Fix the agreement mistake
areas
people
born in australia
and outside Change the capitalization
Australia
australia
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Australia
fallen
from 30 and 40 % to 15 Wrong verb form
fell
and
5% respectively which was Correct word choice
apply
the
noteworthy alteration among the other statistics.Correct article usage
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