The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The pie graphs depict the proportion of each society from
Yemen
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and Italy in 2000 and the prediction for 2050 which
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categorized into three age groups. In brief, based on the forecast, all of the age groups will have downward trends,
whereas
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15-59s in Italy and 0-14s for both countries will have a downward tendency. In detail, the percentage of elderly in
Yemen
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will
increased
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moderately, from 3,6% to 5,7%. The
15
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number of 15
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-59
years
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year
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old people
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is also predicted
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also
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predict to rise dramatically in
Yemen
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reveals from 46,3% to 57,3%.
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, the number of children will have a dip from 3,6% to 5,7%.
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, the number of old people in Italy is
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predicted to soar if compared with other nations, which illustrates from 24,1% to 42,3%. The number of babies and toddlers is contrasting with
Yemen
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which has a major shoot up from 24,1% to 42,3%. Surprisingly, youngsters and adults are reducing from 61,6% to 46,2%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • population skewed
  • younger age groups
  • significant proportion
  • older population
  • projected
  • demographics
  • societal and economic challenges
  • youthful population
  • growing workforce
  • economic growth
  • aging population
  • demand for healthcare
  • pension systems
  • invest in education
  • job creation
  • demographic dividend
  • social policies
  • sustainable
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