Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development?
Many people believe that
,
some nations attain the achievement of international Remove the comma
apply
sports
depends on facilities and promotion top
athletes, Change preposition
of top
while
they believe that, building for non-athletes is not necessary as well as
this
has pros and cons. Let us examine both views before reaching a concrete decision.
Many support the view that international sports
' achievement can become more famous in some countries furthermore
which can enhance sports
man's skills also
develop economy
of nations. Add an article
the economy
For example
, if I were athletes
, I would need training places which are called fitness Fix the agreement mistake
athlete
besides
I could succeed in my competition,
Remove the comma
apply
unless
I had Correct word choice
and unless
not
fitness, I could notCorrect your spelling
no
success
. What is more, only athletic building is crucial Replace the word
succeed
due to
the fact that crowd
did not do runner action. Correct article usage
the crowd
Therefore
, building for sports men
and women is an essential activity.
Correct your spelling
sportsmen
On the other hand
, everyone needs a place which spending
their spare time properly Wrong verb form
spends
moreover
It can prevent obesity. Currently, Obesity is soaring sharply owing to the deficiency of some places which can spend leisure time. For instance
, If John had not venue passing time place plus he would decide
remain in his own home and he would eat junk food because of lack of work. What is more, Add the particle
todecide
this
disease would spring up
cancer which can affect the economy Change preposition
apply
furthermore
gross domestic product well-being. As a result
, sports
facilities are the most important and essential item.
In a nutshell, improving some buildings is the most important along with
which need everyone and athletes both needs. As far as people are concerned development is the needest subject and equality more need a thing.Submitted by tntemuulen54 on
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