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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays
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 of the most important
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 when compared with other languages.
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 of the reasons for its importance is that it can be understood almost in every country around the globe.
English
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 is the native
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 of most countries with large economies like America, Australia and England. In Pakistan, all the big schools emphasize more on
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 they make sure that their students must know how to talk,write and speak in
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.It is a common belief over here that if
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 there is a chance that he or she might be left behind. All the big and prestigious exams like
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the Civil services of Pakistan or Federal Service Commission exams have a compulsory section of
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 of my friends has given a test recently for a job
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 he got cleared in the written part but was not selected in the interview because of his lack of fluency in
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.----------- he has all the qualities and skills that are required for the job but in today’s world the most important thing considered is how fluent a person is. In my ,opinion
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 should have a grip on
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 as it is a need of time. All the big firms require their employees to know
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 because it is a source of communication between the company and international clients. All the applications we are using at present be it Facebook, Instagram, Twitter, Whatsapp, Microsoft or programming
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 everything is in
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, two persons anywhere from the world strangers to each other with different backgrounds, cultures and languages can more likely talk only in
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 it's possible that may know some other same
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 but the chances of knowing
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 are higher when compared with another lingo. Apart from knowing
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 necessary to enlist the importance of local languages in our kids because that thing defines who we actually are and
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where we belonged.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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