Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People
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have different views with regard to the question of how to make our roads safer. In my opinion, both
punishments
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and a range of other measures can be used together to promote better driving habits. On the one hand, strict
punishments
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can certainly help to encourage
people
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to drive more safely. Penalties for dangerous
drivers
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can act as a deterrent, meaning that
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avoid repeating the same offence.
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, there are various types of driving penalties,
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as small fines, licence suspension, driver awareness courses and even prison sentences.
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, the aim of these
punishments
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is to show dangerous
drivers
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that their actions have negative consequences.
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, 68% of
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in the world driving a car without rules do not look at the signs.
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, we
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hope that
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become more disciplined and alert
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and that they follow the rules more carefully.
On the other hand
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, I believe that safe driving can be promoted in several different ways that do not punish
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.
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, it is vitally important to educate
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properly before they start to drive and
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could be done in schools or even as part of an extended or more difficult driving test.
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, more attention could be paid to safe road design. For occurrence, in
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all citizens drive a car with a straightedge they have
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law if someone breaks the rule of charity
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they
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given
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the death penalty.
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, governments or local councils could reduce road accidents
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investing in better public transport, which would mean that fewer
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would need to travel by car.
To sum up
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,
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punishments
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can help to prevent bad driving, I believe that other road safety measures should
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be introduced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • repeat offenses
  • infrastructure improvements
  • public awareness campaigns
  • reckless driving
  • traffic management technologies
  • intelligent traffic lights
  • speed cameras
  • public transportation
  • minimize
  • enhance safety
  • allocate funds
  • road signs
  • road safety
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