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The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Given is a line graph which indicates the
pollution
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 levels in London caused by sulfur
dioxide
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 and
smoke
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 between 1600 and 2000.
Overall
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 , it is obvious that both of
which
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 have rocketed yet fallen back ultimately. Looking more closely at the data ,
smoke
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 and sulphur
dioxide
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 emerged in the late 1500s . Sulphur
dioxide
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 had increased faster than
smoke
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, reaching over 750 micrograms per metre , meanwhile
smoke
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 rose smoothly to approximately 250 micrograms per metre in 1725 . Yet Sulphur
dioxide
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,
as well as
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smoke
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 dropped a bit after 1725 , it didn't
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affect
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 a lot since they soon climbed back in the next 1800s. Both of the mentioned
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pollution
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pollutions
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 peaked in 1850 with figures of 900 and 400 respectively .
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 , the number of
pollution
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 fluctuated after the highest point and had dramatic changes in the middle of the 1900s . Soon reaching the lowest levels of
pollution
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 in the late 1900s.

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