In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and there is no sense of community. Discuss the causes and suggest measures that might deal with this situation.

In different regions all over the
world
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there has been an escalating number of people who have no idea who are their
neighbours
or what they are doing in their life.
This
phenomenon expresses a deficiency of communication within the community. Potential reasons for
that
is
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new house designs and the nature of
work
. The first reason in my point
of
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view for
this
communication shortage is the modern designs of
houses
. In the near past, the man or women were able to see or meet their
neighbour
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neighbours
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when they just standing at the two sides of the fence,
this
fence was the only separator between the
neighbours
'
houses
, so, there was a good chance of saying hi and
then
having a little chat, as these interactions are the first seeds to establish good relationships between the
neighbours
.
On the contrary
, nowadays,
the
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modern house designs, where there
is
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no fences or gardens but only apartments,
has
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replaced
vise
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number of
the
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old-fashioned
houses
and
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the chance to form an environment suited for building relationships. Another reason
to
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this
issue is our jobs. The nature of
work
can play a significant role in forming connections between the
area
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inhabitants.
For instance
, I know a teacher in school who spent months trying to get to know his neighbour who was eventually a doctor in a
far away
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hospital and his shift starting
afternoon
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,
as a result
to
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their
work
circumstances, the teacher and the doctor was unable to meet and getting to know each other. No problem is with no solution. Simply, it is easy to interact with people and
making
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friendships and partnerships,
hence
, enrolling in combining places events, like churches or stadiums, is the first thing to do to avoid
work
timetables and lined-up
houses
. Another solution is our kids, when we become partners in our children's lives, especially in school, we can meet and know the other children's parents which will be a good opportunity to talk and discuss things as the kids
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the reason why we met them. To sum it up, a human being can not live alone, even if he can, he will break after a
while
, so, you can be away from others but
this
will affect your soul, Even if life circumstances
forced
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you to be with no relationships with your
neighbours
in some situation, you have to fight it back and break the chains of insolation,
otherwise
, you probably are going to destroy the community .
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