When designing building, the intended use of the building should be taken in into account as important rather than the outward appearance? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
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outer
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structure of the constructed commercial buildings is more important than its internal infrastructure.
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notion as convenient usage of the space is more important than its outward beauty. Nowadays, hospitals are painted with vibrant
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and constructed like
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hotel
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to
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patients in. Especially,
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is the case with
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. The expensive
furnitures
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, banners,
televion
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television
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are placed in the lobby for advertisement
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.
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this
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makes the place look lavish and fancy, the primary intent of the space is missing. Designing is the
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factor which determines the use and convenience of
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location
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.
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, money is spent more on
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secondary items and not on crucial things like
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. One can see no difference between a hotel and
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center
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due to
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outer planning. Owing to the above,
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internal planning gets hampered leading to inconvenience. Hospitals should have proper entry and exit plans in case of emergencies. Elevators and lifts should be well planned for faster
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towards operations theatres and private patient rooms.
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amenities
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the doctors are the essence of the hospital and should hold more importance than its
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appearance.
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, more remuneration should be offered to qualified doctors and nurses than spending it on unnecessary things. I completely agree that
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the intended use of any building should be the primary goal
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and planning so as to serve the actual purpose of it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intended use
  • functionality
  • efficiency
  • occupants
  • outward appearance
  • subjective
  • aesthetic appeal
  • well-designed
  • balancing
  • successful design
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