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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line charts illustrate the percentages of households, that use electrical appliances and the number of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 per week in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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, usage of electrical devices increased over time,
while
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housework
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hours
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 per week were reduced.
Firstly
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, the washing machine percentage started at 40
per
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cent
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 and gradually increased to 70% in 1960.
Similarly
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, vacuum cleaners began at 30% and incremented steadily to 70 per
cent
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 during the same period.
In addition
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, the refrigerator percentage accounted for 0 in 1920,
then
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 rocketed to 90 per
cent
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 in the next four decades.
On the other hand
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, the number of
housework
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hours
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 was at a peak of 50,
then
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 witnessed a steady fall and reached 20
hours
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 per week. Next 60 years, refrigerator-related household figures continued to increase to 100%vand remained the same till 2019.
Moreover
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, vacuum usage reached a peak of 100%, 20 years later and levelled off another two decades.
Although
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, washing machines showed a marginal dip in the year 1980, tose again and accounted for just over 70%.
Further
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, weekly
hours
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 of
housework
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 decreased slowly and reached a low of 10 per
cent
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 in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, housework, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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