nowadays online shopping is rapidly replacing physical shopping in store. do benefits outweigh the drawbacks

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it is clear that
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technology
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their own place
in
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everywhere .
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days people are more attracted towards online
shoping
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shopping
as compared to
the
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in person
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shoping
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shopping
in
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stores
. I believe that both have their individual importance but shopping with
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online websites is
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conveient
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convenient
method
. In the following
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will try to put light on its positive side .
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with , no matter
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the age group most people want to
use
the easy
method
of shopping during the rush life of these days . As all
knows
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that
shop
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with
the
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online websites is
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easy and
conveint
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convenient
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way for everyone . Because we are living in the technological era , so most of them are in touch with the
use
of
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application
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. Not only
this
,with online shopping no need to go
in
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stores
,
consequently
it will be the saving of
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time
as well . We cannot refuse
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fact that
during
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these days all are having
their
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busy schedule so it is
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good
method
of shopping . To add more
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this
, with
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online shopping it is
also
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convenience
that we can
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back our product too if we are not satisfied with the item that we
orderd
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ordered
, so they have
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policy as well .
This
is
also
a good point in
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online shopping .
Whereas
when we are going inside the
stores
to buy something it will take
our
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huge
time
so sometimes we are not able to buy the item that we want to buy so directly it is
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wastage
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of
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time
.
Instead
of
this
, in person
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shopping
shoping
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we have to
use
the
transporation
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transportation
eithe
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either
the
bus or car to reach
their
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so it adds extra cost in the shopping .
On the other hand
, when we are going inside the
stores
, we can get
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to expose more
varities
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variety
of products . Even we can try the product at the same
time
so can get rid
off from
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the
retrurn
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return
returns
policy . It will give more satisfaction .but we cannot ignore the
easeof
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ease of
the online shopping .
To conclude
,
although
in person
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shopping inside the
stores
give us more options to choose the products and
it
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also
provides us
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the
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satisfaction too ,
but
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most
of
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the
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people
also
like to
use
online purchases during the fast and paced life of today . It is actually a good idea to select the online
method
of shopping .
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