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Some people believe that nowdays we have to many choises. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statment.

#people #nowdays #choises #statment
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The discussion of satisfactory options is surely one that
beg
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 the question. In my opinion, having various choices for each situation
,
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 has become the right statement. Moving forward, when I talk about different solutions the first thing
pops
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 up in my brain is
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internet
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 which made human life so
easier
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.
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,
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Internet
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the Internet
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 has changed the
world
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 it uses to be.
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, these days web content helps students to get knowledge about
there
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 studies
,
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 if any person is lost in
modern
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the modern
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world
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 with help of
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GPS
 map technology which
run
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 through
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internet
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the internet
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 can get access from anywhere and can find the direction.
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,
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Internet
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an Internet
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 connection is not only the option. To illustrate
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, gadgets
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 play
crucial
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a crucial
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 role in developing economical issues.
Such
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 as
drone
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, with the help of
this
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 video
recorder
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 we can get clear portraits of our enemies.
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,
IT
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 sector is not
only
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 one
who
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 has achieved
the
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success.
This
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 can be understood when we consider
medical
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 department. Take
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, in ancient
time
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times
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 people use to travel thousands of
kilometer
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kilometres
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 to get top-notch treatment, but nowadays every city has there own hospitals which
indicates
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drastic
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a drastic
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 change in
economy
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the economy
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. On
other hand
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,
transportation
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 system has
also
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 made
huge
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 impact on society, since
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 century to today’s
world
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 we can clearly
differentiated
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 the development in transit.
To conclude
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, I strongly agree with the statement. Because it’s completely true that people are getting uncountable options for every
circumstances
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. Which result can be seen
on
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world
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the world
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 economy.
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