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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new realway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are different views regarding how to improve public
transport
 in countries.Even though Some individuals agree with building new railway tracks and introducing speedy trains between cities, others prefer to improve current measures of public
transport
.Both measures have strong points to support their opinions but I believe fast train systems will achieve a better result as it serves many commutants saving their money,minimizing travel time and indirectly protecting the environment. On one hand, the Contemporary system of public
transport
 has a requirement of improving the quality,to attract many people to use it rather than using a personal vehicle in order to improve traffic congestion.
Nonetheless
, efforts on optimizing the current system will not be able to handle the target population as it needs an exponential number of buses to fulfil the target which invariably leads to more and more traffic jams and air pollution.
On the other hand
 express trains between cities can carry a large number of travellers in a short time period.
Besides
,it is less time-consuming as there is no issue of handling traffic issues and will be more popular among people.
Furthermore
,it is environmentally friendly,compared to using more vehicles to carry the same number of people
thus
 reducing fuel consumption and air pollution.
Although
 it is an expensive method of
transport
 as it involves a large investment in the beginning , in long term it is beneficial in many ways, In conclusion, I believe constructing facilities to establish fast trains should be encouraged over improving existing methods as it affects individuals, society and the environment in a positive manner .
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