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Transporting large amount of food to richer countries from developing world is having an impact on air pollution and climate change. Some people say such imports should therefore be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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effect
affect
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motorcycles
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impact
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impacts
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negative
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many
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society
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, recently technology is developing every country to make
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product
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 so they will compete making new variant
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products
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traffic
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city
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safety
 so the matter is climate, air and
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product
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, and climate change so every big city would be global warming.
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