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An increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage of our natural environment . what are the causes and solutions ?

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Varied opinions have been put on the table when it comes to the environment.
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 , the
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 of consumer goods is increasing day by day .
As a result
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 , the natural environment gets damaged
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 activity . In
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 essay , I will explain the causes and possible solutions in paragraphs to come. The first and perhaps the most important environmental problem
due to
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 the production of consumer goods seems to be the reduced
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 of
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 . By ,
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 I mean that companies and factories need a huge space to start their business so they use forests and land for their construction of themselves.
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 ,
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 can ruin the beauty of nature and proves detrimental to the animals because many of them live in forests and villages . The second reason appears to be the transportation of goods can prove hazardous for marine life .
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 , products are usually transported by ships and in
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 cases , a leach from them can affect water animals . Moving towards the solutions , the government should set a strict rule to control the
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 of
trees
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 knocked down by companies and factories.
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 , if a new company cuts 35
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 for their construction
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 it should plant the same
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 of
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 near their a sight .
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 can be helpful to regulate the amount of oxygen in the air .
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 , people should use eco-friendly products in order to make the environment pollution free and
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 utilize a good disposal method to make places clean from garbage . In a nutshell , I think that these solutions can be helpful for regulating pollution , but individuals have a big role to play to solve these problems .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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