People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge, etc.). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities?

It is said that entering
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university
is
obligatory
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thing in our life.
However
,in my opinion,you don't have to attend
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the
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university
if you don't want
this
.For some
of
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the
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people
it is only a waste of time.
Firstly
,universities and colleges were created to help
people
with
studing
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studying
in
subject
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the subject
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they like the most.
Due to
this
,plenty of
people
enter the
university
to connect their life with engaging things.
For example
,my sister's dream job was
a
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teacher.She always was interested in studying and caring.
Hence
to
this
,when she graduated from school she
choosed
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chose
choose
university
for
teacher
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qualification.
Firstly
,that was tough for her.In
this
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profession
proffesion
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you have to stay calm and patient to be the perfect teacher for the children.
However
,she is pleased with her choice and she is
studing
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studying
children in high school.
Secondly
,for some
people
even studying at school is not a piece of cake.For them studying is not a part of developing,it is a
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from day to day.In the modern
era
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it is quite popular when parents make their children enter
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university
without giving them any choice.From my point of
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it is terrible.All
people
must have
right
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to do what they want with their life.On one hand,attending universities can help you with searching for work.
On the other hand
,now you can learn mostly everything by yourself.
Thus
,adolescents can earn money without wasting time on useless things. In conclusion,modern universities provide us with a wide range of study programs.That help to make student curious about attending
the
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university
.
However
,plenty of today's students don't want to attend it,because they can learn all useful things by themselves
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