Unemployment is a serious issue throughout the world. A number of changes need to be made to reduce the problem. What should a government do to solve this issue?

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unemployment is a well-known crisis for many years all around the world.An increase in population and limited work opportunities have contributed so much to escalating
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under control. The ministry
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prime responsibility for making appropriate development in their policies to bring
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to an extent. Creating more job opportunities in the public and private sectors is a very good solution to reduce the unemployment level. Government should make policies to invest more in the public sector to promote job openings . Another tactic is to make attractive
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in foreign affairs to welcome more investors into the public and private sectors,which eventually creates more job opportunities in the long run. Another important step that can be taken in regard to addressing
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issue is to support small-scale businesses and start-ups. Promoting individuals and small groups by providing subsidies and grants can create a boom in small-scale industries eventually helping more people to find jobs in
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industries. Small-scale businesses can contribute to the infrastructure development of the area. Promoting tourism is another way of creating more jobs in society. proper advertisements, tourist-friendly visa policies, and travel safety are the main reasons that bring more tourists into a country. by ensuring these are well managed by the local and state ministry, the number of tourists visiting the country will be increased.
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will help the hospitality sector to function well and provide more jobs to the people .
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unemployment is a reason for concern around the world, by proper governing and management by the local and state ministries matter can be addressed effectively.
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