The growth of online shoping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Agree or disagree?

In today's era online shopping has been trending among
people
, because it is
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tool that
people
buy anything at any
time
in a
a
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very easy way,
,
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it may lead to
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done all shopping
mall
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malls
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and small
shops
in cities and towns. I firmly agree with the given statement and my
reasons
for
stand
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will be discussed in
further
paragraphs. out of all the
reasons
of
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online shopping would be close all
shops
in cities and towns,
primary
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the primary
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reasons
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reason
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is that today more
people
buy
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a product
the product
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product
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products
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or
good
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goods
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from online
webside
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website
websites
, because they get more
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discounts
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and lots of
option
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options
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.
Therefore
,
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of
custmer
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customer
customers
will
be reduce
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in
townshop
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township
townships
and
cities
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city
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shops
.
Furthermore
,
people
not
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do not
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get
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the lateast
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lateast
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latest
product
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products
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in their near
shops
but they can
recevied
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received
online
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them online
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very easily.
For instance
,
any
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lateast
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latest
model of phone can not available for 1 week on
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a moblie
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moblie
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mobile
shop but
its
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available on online
webside
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website
websites
like
flipcard
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flip card
, amazon
ect
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etc
... another
reasons
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to support my stand is that if
people
buy every
product
from
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online
then
no one can go for that
on
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in
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shops
. It is true that
people
alway
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always
find
easy
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an easy
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way
with
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cheap
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a cheap
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price
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so
its
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available online.
For Example
, working
people
does not have
time
to go shopping in
market
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so
that
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they buy basic daily use
product
from
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online.
Such
as milk, vegetables etc...
Morover
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Moreover
, online shopping give more facilities and option to their customer compared to local
shops
and
mall
,
as a
result
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more and more
people
attract
toward
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the
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online shopping. To
illustrat
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illustrate
, any person can buy foreign
product
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products
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or goods with just one click. Some
people
argue that
although
online shopping, local
shops
and
mall
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still alive in future there will be no change. That means today
people
have
option
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the option
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to buy
from
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apply
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online but still they go their near local
shops
for their basic
necessary
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necessities
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.
Additionaly
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, online shopping take
time
not provide things on
time
while
emergency Like
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requrment
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requirement
of
medicin
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medicine
. To wrap up the discussion, it can
said
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that
although
basic necessary
buy
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from local
shops
, my reason
such
as easy
as well as
cheap price shopping from online
webside
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website
websites
will be close
local
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to local
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shops
and
mall
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malls
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in future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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