the graphs show basic information about employment.

the graphs show basic information about employment.
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This
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is a topic which revealed comparing the employee including females and males from 1995 to 2005 in five countries. It was a statistic for employees' gender and
amount
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.
According to
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the bar chart, it revealed female labour was less than male labour from 1995~2005. In the past year, we could find the smallest female labour was in New Zealand, it was nearly around 25% of the population in 1995.
Conversely
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, the largest
amount
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of female employees was in Switzerland, it almost doubled the situation.
On the other hand
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, the male employer’s
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is always more than the female's. By the time to 2005, the result had changed, the number of female workers increased in New Zealand and more than in Australia,
however
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, Australia became the
last
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one in the bar chart.
While
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to 2005, ten years later, we could find the picture revealed the largest
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of male employers in Iceland since 1995, it was continuously increased population during the past ten years.
Overall
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, we could find the male-employer’semployer ratio was balanced and equal between 1995 and 2005,
nevertheless
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, we could compare the female employers between 1995 and 2005, the USA and New Zealand had increased more than other countries.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment sectors
  • economic cycles
  • recessions
  • booms
  • demographic groups
  • qualifications
  • employability
  • globalization
  • outsourcing
  • multilingual
  • remote work
  • freelance
  • technological advancements
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