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You recently stayed in a hotel in a large city. The weather was very unusual for the time of year and the heating / cooling system in the hotel was quite inadequate. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: give details of what went wrong explain what you had to do to overcome the problem at the time say what action you would like the manager to take You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..., You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should write at least 150 words

#hotel #city #weather #time #year #system #manager #action #address #minutes
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to express my deep disappointment with the visit that I stayed
your
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at your
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hotel
 with my family
last
 week. I will explain why I and my family
unsatisfied
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in
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with
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 your
hotel
. I had researched so much your
summer
hotel
 before booking. Many visitors wrote good things about you.
In
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For
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this
 reason, we decided to book your
hotel
.
Firstly
, After long travelling, when we arrived
the
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hotel
. Normally in
summer
,
weather
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the weather
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 was nearly 40 degrees
the
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 location of
hotel
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the hotel
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. After the checked our ticked, we arrived
our
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at our
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 room. As the weather was so hot, I opened the air
condition
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. But, unfortunately, the air
condition
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conditioner
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 could not get cold enough in the room. I said
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the staf
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staf
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stuff
staff
 about
this
 problem but, no one did help me. As my
solution
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 I opened the window.
However
, even I opened the window, it was not cooled
adequate
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.
Although
 your
hotel
's beach was very beautiful, because of your cooling system, our holiday was very bad. I would like
to
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you to
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 please accept my complaint and next
summer
 give me
big
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a big
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discout
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discount
discounts
 for
summer
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a summer
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 holiday. I am looking forward to hearing
to
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from
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 you soon. Yours faithfully, Orhan Veli
Submitted by orhanveli2006 on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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