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Studying business or science related subjects at university level is more important than arts related courses like literature. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary world, literacy and numeracy have a pivotal role in individuals' life.
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 some
people
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 believe that business and science are more important than
art
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, others mention the idea that society ought to accept the importance of
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. I will talk about my agreement or disagreement in
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 stages. On the one hand, careers related to business and science are growing immensely
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 the income
people
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 can have in the future.
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, in Iran students, under the pressure from their families, want to become doctors or businessmen.
People
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 want to guarantee the future by choosing these kinds of fields.
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, they think these majors are more important than others.
On the other hand
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, a large number of groups mention the idea that
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 is a necessity of society. Because it can protect the heritage of human being history
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 handed down from generation to generation.
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, artists in artworks show the culture of the specific area where they are living there or mention the sentimental behaviour of locals in a specific historical period. When we explore Hafez's poems we can find out
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 poet
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 his country's conditions had to use metaphors in his poems.
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, all the aforementioned points can bring us to the conclusion that because of modern life requirements and some financial needs,
people
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 choose other fields rather than
art
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. But
art
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 is entwined with culture.
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this
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 reason, governments should allocate funds to internalize the importance of educating pupils from childhood.
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