Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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I think every
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is important for us. We have to learn everything through our past, present and future. Some
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say that History is one of the most important school subjects it's true but it has to go
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today's world which is
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and
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. How can we move without our history, the
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behind us "The ancient
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" is the most powerful
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who
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us to move forward.
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taught us how to fire
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light, How to find
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with
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and animals, How to survive and others. Of
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we wouldn't know that without them.
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and
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are important too. They give us a chance to move forward with them. Without
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we're just
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normally
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humans
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being. We spend our daily life with no useful. Without them we have no light we have no food, we have no comfortable stuff
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things. Old
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without these things. Humans
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lots of invention to give
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people
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based on a limited government. May I gives one example of the development of
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and
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two things it
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us a chance to be a member of
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the ASEAN
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"Association of South East Asia
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" we can be able to communicate with the other 9 countries with
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high
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us to be a TEAMWORK with the 9 other countries to develop our country. help us in terms of transportation, communication, collaboration etc. it can definitely hold on to that hope
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in the near future. 131
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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