In many countries, good schools and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for fewyears, but others think everyone should be free to choose where they work. Discuss and give your opinion.

These days, public debate has going on over whether teachers and doctors should
work
first in rural
areas
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those who agree and
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disagree
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the two sides and give my
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opinion
. Let's begin by looking
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ideas about the obligation to
work
in
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the countryside
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for
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years. The primary factor is that, because they are new
professionals
, recently graduated teachers and doctors do not have
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enough
experience to deal with a large demand, which happens in big cities.
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, during their turn, they will
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to treat people with more intensity
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in rural
areas
. Take the surgery of
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example
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, where the medic must
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take fast decisions in order to save a life.
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Secondly
, when masters and medics are sent to
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areas
, they
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covered
cover
a gap of
professionals
related
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areas
. What I mean
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it is that, because
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lack of
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of
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professionals
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living in
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cities, the demand always is bigger
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services. Turning to the other side of the argument, people say that in
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there are not
enought
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enough
resources in the
horpitals
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hospitals
hospital
to do a good job.
Similarly
, the schools,
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instance
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, do not offer
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their children,
apropriated
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appropriated
appropriate
material to learn. Eventually,
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matters repel good
professionals
to
work
in
this
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areas
because the situation in
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totally
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different
. Another issue in the obligation
to begin
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carrier
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far from metropoles is that the money invested during their studies
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to
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high to be
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covered
by the low salaries in small places. There are those who say that the
paiyment
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payment
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30% less
then
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in
centre
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areas
. All things in consideration, the conditions of
work
in
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countrysides
countryside
are not easy and because of it, the population of
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cities are suffering because
the
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lack of
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to
work
there. Personally, I believe that the best way to cover their necessities is, in fact, to obligate them to
work
for
few
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years.
Accordingly
, it would be advisable for the
govenment
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government
to invest more in hospital and school facilities to call more attention to recently graduated
professionals
.
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