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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the electricity generation in
Germany
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 and
France
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 from all types and renewables in 2009.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that conventional thermal was the significant source in
Germany
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whereas
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France
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 relied mainly on nuclear power. Another point to note is that
Germany
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 used biomass the most in renewable energy whilst hydroelectric was the most substantial renewable power in
France
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.
Firstly
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, conventional thermal contributed markedly, with 59.6% in
Germany
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, followed by nuclear, with 23.0% and
then
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 renewables, with 17.4%.
In contrast
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, nuclear energy was the major contribution, with 76.0%.
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, conventional thermal and renewables contributed considerably low, with 10.3% and 13.7% respectively.
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, in terms of renewable energy,
Germany
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 used biomass the most, with 39.3% and the wind was slightly lower, with 36.9%.
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, hydroelectric and solar contributed a mere 17.7% and 6.1% respectively.
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, hydroelectric contributed a greater proportion in
France
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, with 80.5%
while
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 only 10.5% of wind, 8.1% of biomass and 0.9% of solar were used.

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