Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The public expects that those who are participating in social activities should not be focused towards money .In my opine, I agree that
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should work without expecting any rewards or incentives.
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, voluntarily coming forward without showing any interest in rewards for being part of the programmes is observed in both primary and high
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. A wide range of activities is happening in every educational institution all over the country
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as organizing cleanup drives, educating younger ones who are in the backward classes and conducting numerous campaigns to support charity works.
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, Thyagam foundation in Mumbai is a
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non-profit organization working towards balancing the basic needs of the poor people and
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within a time period of four years the firm was able to help more than fifty per cent of the crowd.
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, in collaboration with government departments
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conducted a pollution control drive. Travelled to different parts of the country to conduct research and development in order to identify the problems faced by the people in
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rural areas.
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, there were health programmes planned with the voluntary participation of
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in assisting doctors and
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joined in flood campaigns .
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,
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year there was a severe flood in nearby areas of Kerala it was very difficult for the public authorities to communicate with those who were affected but with the involvement of
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things become easier and saved thousands of people.
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I agree that freely working without showing interest in money is important for a better nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unpaid community service
  • compulsory part
  • high school programs
  • sense of duty
  • social responsibility
  • essential life skills
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • leadership
  • work experience
  • employable
  • community improvement
  • local community
  • time management
  • empathy
  • compassionate attitude
  • diversion from academics
  • critics argue
  • varying quality
  • inconsistency
  • students’ experiences
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