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Nowadays in many countries women have full time job. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#countries #women #time #job #household #tasks #men
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The bar chart provides information about how the families in one nation distributed their weekly income into 8 categories in 1968 and in 2018. Generally speaking, it is obvious that there were four items decreased
whereas
 three categories increased . Meanwhile, one of the options stood at the same percentage in both years.
To begin
 with , the percentage of food in 1968 was double that in 2018, 35% and roughly 17%, respectively.
However
, the proportion of leisure accounted for approximately 9% in 1968 and
then
 grew to about 22% in 2018. With regard to housing and transport , both of them were less in 1968 than in 2018, and the former was 10% and roughly 19%
while
 the latter was approximately 7% and almost 15%.
In addition
, fuel and power , clothing and footwear and personal goods were more in 1968 than in 2018 for approximately 4 % and roughly 9%, respectively.
Nevertheless
, in both these two years , household goods remained the same at around 8%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender equality
  • Fairness
  • Household tasks
  • Work-life balance
  • Stress reduction
  • Quality time
  • Career advancement
  • Domestic duties
  • Role modeling
  • Shared responsibility
  • Practicality
  • Modern society
  • Equity
  • Unfairly burdened
  • Positive example
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