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Restoration of old building in main cities involves enormous government expenditure. It would be more beneficial to spend this money to build new houses and roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Preservation of old vintage
buildings
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 in cities requires a huge amount of
money
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 from the
government
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 and
this
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money
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 can be utilized to build new infrastructures. My standpoint is old
buildings
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 should be restored not for utilization but to be preserved as heritage. Preserving old
buildings
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 is one of the expensive expenses of the state and every year a lot of
money
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 is needed to restore them. There are several reasons behind
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 restoration and the most prominent one is their historical values.
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, old
buildings
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 not only have an artistic appeal but
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 are long-lasting. If we preserve them properly they can serve us for more hundred years. I personally believe that, if old houses are given proper care and maintenance they will serve us with the specific purpose they are used for.
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, they will enhance the beauty of the cities with vintage ambience and will attract more tourists.
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, the city of Melbourne is still using so many restored
buildings
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 from the past and they provide a beautiful vintage feeling. In modern city lives, using a lot of
money
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 to build new houses and roads is necessary.
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 old
buildings
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 can be used for several purposes new houses needed to be built to fulfil other purposes. Modern city life can not be confined only to old
buildings
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 and roads new
ones
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 are needed.
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, it is difficult for the
government
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 to preserve old
ones
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 and create new infrastructures. It can be possible if the
government
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 properly utilizes the resources and manpower it has.
Government
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 and citizens should work hand in hand to build new
ones
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 and restore old
ones
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.
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, preserving old
buildings
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 can be expensive but because of their appeal and values
government
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 should get concerned to ensure proper preservation and utilization of them.

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