Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

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can be seen that many countries achieve international sports by focusing on building specialised facilities
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to train top athletes rather than
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there are facts that ,investing in specially designed techniques can provide a lot of
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nations are always
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winning games
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upon national players .So developing particularized
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for achieving goals.
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,we should not forget that each individual
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right to enjoy the services given by
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are restricted to utilize their
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,I believe that though the nation could get its desired dream by contributing only
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athletes
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we should not forget that, for the progress of
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,no one should be left behind .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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