In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays people stored knowledge on the Internet. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today's, cutting-edge technologies change human
being life
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lives
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significantly.
subsequently
,
This
matter affects
storing
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the storing
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way of
books
.
Although
some communities believe that e-book destroys the nature of the book, others think that
this
technology gives a new and better meaning to the book. In
this
essay merits and demerits of both points of view will be discussed. New tools and inventions in the
last
century, give people improved methods to store data like text.
This
way of storage is more intelligent because we can transport these very easily. To illustrate, the transportation of 1000 reports in the past was a really huge work to be done but now we can move them on a CD.
Moreover
, disasters
such
as war, flood, earthquake, and fire could destroy libraries and
consequently
millions of reports in a fraction of a second. To clarify, keeping bills on hard disks is safer.
In addition
, using hard disks for storing statements
eliminate
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eliminates
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neccecety of cutting trees to write
books
.
On the other hand
, from the readers' point of view, reading bills on paper is more comfortable.
for example
, they claim that e-book affects human eye health.
Additionally
, they say electronic
books
do not have the same good feeling as paper
books
.
Also
,
researches
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research
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show
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shows
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that concentrating on a subject is more
when
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important when
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you read it on paper. In conclusion, like other technologies, keeping reports on hard disks or reading them on the screen has both negative and positive sides.
However
, I think its advantages are more than its advantages.
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