The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown leisure activities of Australian children
The given bar chart provides information about the percentage of leisure activities between females and males (5-14 years old) in Australia.
Overall
, Watching TV or videos done by both boys
and girls dominated the activities as the most popular while
there were different numbers compared with both genders.
According to
data, the highest proportion was taken by watching TV or videos which was
100%. Followed by bike riding and electronic or computer games which showed a slightly similar pattern where electronic and computer games and bike riding in girls were more than Change the verb form
were
boys
, 80% and 77% respectively as well as
60% and 58% for done by boys
.
On the other hand
, skateboarding and rollerblading were considered less popular than others. The percentage of boys
who love to do the activity was just under 40% which was more than that of girls, contributing 24%. With the different trends, women preferred doing art and craft instead
, with nearly 60% attracting them to do it, however
, men are just about 35%.Submitted by febriantyhasanah on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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