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The use of social media, such as Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #facebook #twitter #contact #century #outweigh
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nowdays
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face
 to
face
 contact is
replacing
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 through social media
services
such
 as
facebook
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Facebook
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 and
twitter
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.
While
 some people believe that
this
 is advantageous to have
it
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, others are
the
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 opinion that having less use will maintain the proper balance.
This
 essay will analyze both sides of the argument before arriving at a reasoned conclusion. There are certainly several
benifits
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benefits
 to having social
services
.
To begin
 with, these
services
 are very convenient, time
saver
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savers
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,
money
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and money
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saver
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savers
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.
In
addition
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 we can talk with our
loveones
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loved ones
love ones
 as soon as we want, we do not need to think
how
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about how
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 can we talk or meet with them as thank
to
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these social
services
. We can share our happiness,
joyness
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joys
 and
also
 problems.
As a
result
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,result
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 it helps in
long distance
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 relationships.
For instance
, during covid
student
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students
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attend
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 their online classes through social
services
 and
also
 people know about their relatives .
Secondly
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 we can
sale
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 effortlessly
whereas
 we do not need to worry about
meet
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 personally. That said , there are
also
 some downsides to having social
services
. Youngsters can easily cut out with their parents
,
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 because they believe that they are in touch with them, so they do not need to meet
face
 to
face
.
As a
result
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 they prefer to have
meeting
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a meeting
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 online
instead
 of
walk
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walking
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 to them.
Furthermore
, they have
least
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 contribution
in
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to
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 playing,
socialization
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 and
contribute
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contributing
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in
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to
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community
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the community
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. If they use these less , so they can easily understand how crucial is to focus not only
social
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on social
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 media but
also
have
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on have
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 part of society. Giving back to
society
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the society
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 they should have held programs which will probably help them.
To conclude
, it is good to
having
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have
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 social
services
.
however
 these are very convenient,it is hard to see that people
are forget
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forget
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 to meet their
loveones
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loved ones
love ones
 personally.
Whereas
, I believe that it is worth
to use
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using
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 with
limit
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a limit
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.
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