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Some people believe that the restoration of old buildings costs too much; we should demolish them and build new ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Dear myself, You are doing a pretty good job of following your goals. You’ve set out your goals
this
 year to learn English and Chinese, to become a blogger,and a
co–writer
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 for the newspaper, and to love yourself more. You can now understand basic Chinese communication without having to read the subtitles. You can now write blogs in English (qualified ones from your mom, of course) and you are writing stories for the Muc Tim newspaper. I am proud of you for that. You have rewarded yourself with a trip to the bookstore at the weekend with your friends, learning how to mix and match,…
Although
 I’m really satisfied with the progress
this
 year, there are still things that I want to “fix” about you. You need to learn how to control your anger, and how to not be distracted by “uncontrollable distractions” as others' need of making noises,… You need to be more disciplined, and stop expecting that you can make progress without training properly. Do not interrupt your routine of sitting at the table every evening to work on your goals. You have an amazing imagination. You have the skill to talk in front of people. You can draw beautifully. You can dance. Maintain it. Love yourself. Improve your mistakes. Be disciplined. Be confident. Be positive. Charge your positive energy every day. Acknowledge your effort.
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