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Some people prefer working in a group while others work alone. Discuss both sides.

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Aside from the workload in an assignment, each student has a special personality, let alone when it comes to those who have mental health problems,
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 as ADHD and Bipolar disorder.
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 a few people have their own preference to
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 as a team on a school project and the other students prefer to
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 alone. From my point of view, both options have drawbacks and conditions. In
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 essay, I will examine what kind of projects will be best suited as teamwork or individual . First of all, normal individuals might not find any difficulties in choosing whether group teaming or do their own homework.
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, freshmen who have special treatment do not need peers to
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 with. A good illustration of
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 is if someone with ADHD does his or her assignment, it would be challenging if he or she should have a group because of her or his inability to have a good relationship with others.
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, some others are better at doing their
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 with classmates.
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, individuals with Bipolar disorder could not manage to finish their studies which needs a large amount of routine since they tend to get bored often.
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 can result in lower grades. To summarize, students' preference for working in a group or alone depends on both workloads and personalities, mainly if someone has a mental disorder.
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, there is no silver bullet in choosing between both sides. With the rise of technology in the education system,
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 students can do their homework with personalized methods.
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