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The graph shows the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012

The graph shows the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012
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The line graph depicts the
population
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 of several turtle
species
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 in India from 1980 to 2012. Despite the fact that just a few hundred
turtles
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 remained in India. In general, all turtle
species
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 were at 100 in 1980, but by 2012, Olive Ridley
turtles
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 had increased their numbers and remained at the top. Leatherback
turtles
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,
on the other hand
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, came in
last
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. That was evident to me; the number of progeny of leatherback
turtles
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 grew starting in 1980 and stayed at 135 by 1997. After
then
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, it managed to stay around 125 through several ups and downs until 2012. Green
turtles
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 have been facing
population
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 declines since the early 1980s.
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, their
population
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 fluctuated and stayed at 85 in 2012.
Furthermore
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, leatherback
turtles
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 were going extinct at a quicker rate than other
species
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; their number started to drop one by one and had reached 19 by 2012.
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, the surviving
species
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 were able to consistently regulate their
population
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, with occasional ups and downs from the 1980s until 2012.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, species, turtles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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