The graph shows the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012

The graph shows the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012
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The line graph depicts the
population
of several turtle
species
in India from 1980 to 2012. Despite the fact that just a few hundred
turtles
remained in India. In general, all turtle
species
were at 100 in 1980, but by 2012, Olive Ridley
turtles
had increased their numbers and remained at the top. Leatherback
turtles
,
on the other hand
, came in
last
. That was evident to me; the number of progeny of leatherback
turtles
grew starting in 1980 and stayed at 135 by 1997. After
then
, it managed to stay around 125 through several ups and downs until 2012. Green
turtles
have been facing
population
declines since the early 1980s.
Furthermore
, their
population
fluctuated and stayed at 85 in 2012.
Furthermore
, leatherback
turtles
were going extinct at a quicker rate than other
species
; their number started to drop one by one and had reached 19 by 2012.
Finally
, the surviving
species
were able to consistently regulate their
population
, with occasional ups and downs from the 1980s until 2012.
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