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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

#spite #advances #agriculture #people #world #case
Nowadays, the number of individuals who suffer from
starving
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are
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 still high
in
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the
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wordwide
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worldwide
.
Although
,
the
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agriculture has grown considerably.
Thus
, there is a crucial debate associated with what reasons cause
this
 type of
problems
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problem
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 and what
community
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communities
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 can do to reduce the percentage of hungry
people
 in the entire world. A vast range of
people
 who live in
the
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deprived areas
suffer
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suffers
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 from
starving
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starvation
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 even dying
due to
 hungry. Despite, advances in technology and agriculture. The
amount
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 of hungry
people
do
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 not
decresed
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decreased
decrease
 significantly.
Moreover
, numerous poor countries face serious issues with
lack
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a lack
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 of
foods
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food
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.
For instance
, many African populations suffer from
malnutritions
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malnutrition
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 and their children have many physical and mental problems
due to
 lack of
essentiale
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essential
nutritians
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nutrition
nutritious
among
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 their
food
.
Furthermore
, several families who live in poverty condition are deprived of basic
aminities
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amenities
such
 as
food
 and education.
Frpm
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From
 a psychological
view point
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viewpoint
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, starving can damage
to
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the
barin
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brain
 and causes many mental
problem
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problems
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 and
also
 can increase
rate
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the rate
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 of crime in
a
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sociaty
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society
. In my opinion, governments should raise public awareness about helping
people
 who live in
low
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 standard of living or in deprived areas through
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programes
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programmes
programs
,
such
 as free workshops or seminars.
In addition
,
goverments
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governments
government
 should
provaid
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provide
 basic
aminitices
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amenities
 for
who
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those who
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 live in poor
condition
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conditions
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 and
also
 provide
financiale
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financial
 support for charities to reduce the number of
people
 who suffer from poverty.
Also
,
goverments
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governments
government
 can hold a
programe
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programme
 to help poor
contries
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countries
 to provide
foods
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food
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 and clean water.
For example
, GM
food
 can bring better
condition
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conditions
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 for poor countries
such
 as Africa.
In other words
, in Africa
due to
lack
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 of water and excessive
heat
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 a range of plants can not cultivate. So, GM
food
 can alter plants to adapt
a
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drought situation. In conclusion,
starving
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starvation
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 is
important
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an important
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 issue that many country
challenge
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challenges
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 with it. In my
view
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,view
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 governments can really help to reduce
this
 type of problem through financial
assist
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assistance
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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