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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates alterations in the population of Australian-born and non-Australian-born
people
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 who reside in cities, towns and urban
areas
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 from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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, the percentage of individuals who reside in urban
areas
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 increased dramatically.
On the contrary
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, more and more
people
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 choose to live outside the rural
areas
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 during a given time period. In 1995, the percentage of
people
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 who were born in Australia and lived in the cities was about 50% and that number rose to 65% in 2010. The data for the non-Australian population moved up 20%, from 60% in 1995 to 80% 15 years later. Compared with figures for rural residents both Australians and non-Australians plummeted sharply, where numbers decreased from 30% to 15% for
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 and from 40% to nearly 5% for foreigners.
On the other hand
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, the number of
people
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 born in villages has decreased by at least 5% in all categories at the given time period. Even though,
this
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 change is relatively tiny when
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compared to the decline
of
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in
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of birth in rural
areas
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. The birth rate of rural
area
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areas
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 in
people
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 born in Australia and outside Australia
fallen
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 from 30 and 40 % to 15 and 5% respectively which was
the
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a
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 noteworthy alteration among the other statistics.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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