IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

ome people believe that governments should ban dangerous sports even though others claim they should have the freedom to choose a sport to their liking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#ome #people #governments #ban #sports #freedom #sport #support
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The given bar chart and the pie
charts
Use synonyms
 compare the
number
Use synonyms
 of people in Glasgow having three levels of education: (university, school, and no qualifications ) in 2010. There is information about five groups in the bar chart and gender in the pie
charts
Use synonyms
.
Overall
Linking Words
, most people who graduated from university are in younger groups;
however
Linking Words
, most of the old age have no qualifications. The information given in
pie
Correct article usage
the pie
show examples
charts
Use synonyms
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
 close to each other except for a little difference in education.
According to
Linking Words
 the bar chart , there is 76% of people which is the highest
number
Use synonyms
, have university degrees between the age of (24-35).
in addition
Linking Words
,
ages
Use synonyms
 between (16-24) and (35-50) were the same in the
number
Use synonyms
 of 71%, and two others were 50%, about
ages
Use synonyms
 50 to 75, and just 25% in those over 75.
this
Linking Words
 is clear that having no qualifications are the same at young
ages
Use synonyms
,
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 9%,and rising to 72% in the oldest
ages
Use synonyms
. School certifications were around 15% and 20% in younger
ages
Use synonyms
, except for the lowest
number
Use synonyms
 of
charts
Use synonyms
, which is 3% in
Correct pronoun usage
those
show examples
over 75s .
Submitted by TUTOO on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: