The bar chart below shows the percentages of three groups of Japanese children taking part in four kinds of activities in 2018

The bar chart below shows the percentages of three groups of Japanese children taking part in four kinds of activities in 2018
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the chart compares the proportions of three
age
groups of
children
who participated in four types of
activities
in Japan in 2018.
Overall
, it is clear from the bar chart that watching tv was the most popular
activities
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Japanese
children
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age
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5 to 16 on average. there were the least Japanese kids playing computer games at the
age
of 12 to 16 in 2018. In the
age
group of 5 to 8 years old, about 90% of kids preferred to watch tv, the figures for
activities
of reading , playing computer games and reading the bike saw a similar percentage, at around 63%, 60% and 64% respectively. in the
age
group of 9 to 11 years old, the percentage of Japanese
children
taking part in
activities
was relatively even, from 58% to 80% in the group of 12-16 years old, the more popular
activities
for kids were riding a bike and watching tv, which figure was 81% and 80% .
by contrast
, just 40%
children
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chose to play computer games.
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