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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center, now and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The
two
 plans show the university
sports
centre
 as it is now and redevelopment plans for the future.
Overall
, the university
sports
centre
 will be completely expanded in the future,
while
 the
facilities
 in the middle will remain the same. A number of recreational
facilities
 going to be established on the east and west. The current
sports
centre
 has very few
facilities
 for students, with only seating on the east, changing room on the west, a gym on the north and the 25-metre-long swimming pool with a reception in the middle. Meanwhile, there are
two
 rectangular-shaped outdoor courts on the left and right sides of the
sports
centre
. Following redevelopment, the
sports
centre
 will be extended and both outdoor courts will be knocked down. The middle of the
sports
centre
 going to remain the same just by lengthening the gym to the east.
Additionally
, there will be
two
 more changing rooms on the southeast and southwest. The
sports
 hall going to be constructed in proximity to the seating and
two
 dancing studios
them
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.
Moreover
, a considerably huge leisure pool will be introduced in the west.
Lastly
,
two
 commercial
facilities
 will be built near the reception, particularly the
sports
 shop on the southwest and the cafe on the southeast.
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