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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people argue that
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relocation
reallocation
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workforce
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 should be prohibited.
Therefore
 experts in various fields should stay in the
country
 where they
done
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 their
qualification
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qualifications
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.
While
other
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others
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 oppose and claim that employees should have complete
freedome
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freedom
 with respect to the location they desire to work. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both points of
views
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 and argue in
favor
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 of a free labour movement across countries. The qualification in a
country
 is
optimazed
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optimized
 and tailored to the needs of a given nation. Not only that
that
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a job training course is done in
country’s
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 language
,
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it is
also
 focused on
country specific
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 features
such
 as
nature
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 of people, software standards and
flow
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 of work. Take a medic
for example
,
although
 the underlying science is the same in each
country
, the approach and healing methods can differ among regions.
Furthermore
, the equipment used to
preforme
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perform
 certain operations can vary and
thus
 lead to improper manipulation and
consequently
 to
lose
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in
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 lives.
On the other hand
, having done
course
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a course
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 in the
country
, where a worker is later employed, gives the benefit of
overall
prepeardness
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preparedness
 for the work.
Moreover
, it
prevets
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 a brain drain to other countries, which at the same time ensures that a given
country
 has enough high-skilled labour. The downside of
this
 approach,
however
, is that it limits
peoples’
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 freedom. Forcing people to stay in a
country
 can lead to frustration and
hence
 lower the persons’ motivation and
preformance
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performance
. In conclusion,
while
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making high-skilled workers stay at the same place they carried out their training, can lead
no
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 shortages
in
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 experts. It is, undoubtedly, a gross violation of
workers
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 right and
therefore
 I am convinced that labour should be allowed
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 their knowledge in other countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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