Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, there are so many innovations and experiments based on
healthcare
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system
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worldwide. Most
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the
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businessmen and multinational companies invest their capital
on
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in
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these
researches
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research
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and
projects
which are connected with
medical
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the medical
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sector. Not only that but
also
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government
also
interfere
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these experiments. In
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as well as
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attention to
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and
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the drawbacks
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of medica
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medica
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medical
research
projects
.
Firstly
, private entrepreneurs and funding groups always try to invest to earn profits from their investments
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is
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good or harmful to the community.
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, they may force to engage with profitable
projects
without giving parity towards social well-being.
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of
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scientists can not focus on
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the target
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output of the
projects
.
For instance
, so many healthcare research
projects
were based on
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a vaccine
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vaccine
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vaccines
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which
are
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related to
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from Corona epidemic though
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showed allergies. Because these companies had
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a competition
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to earn profits by selling their products and their products and they haven’t enough time to observe the side effects of their production.
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, I think
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the govenment
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govenment
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government
should interfere to manage the
researches
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research
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as well as
projects
which are focused on medicine.
Furthermore
,
government
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the government
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must make new rules and regulations to control it,
otherwise
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it may focus to build up a tragedy.
However
, authorities should give freedom to do experiments under their power.
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, there must be
strong
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law system to manage
the
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medical products and they must never give to change
the
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gentic
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genetic
modification as it can be used as a
bio weapon
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bioweapon
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.
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Eventually
, I can conclude that every
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have
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the freedome
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freedome
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freedom
to do new researches and
projects
which are
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on
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medication, but
government
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the government
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should keep an eye on these companies. I think it is the best way to minimize the disadvantages of
medicine related
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medicine-related
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projects
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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