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what is the causes and effects of water pollution? what are the solutions?

#effects #water #pollution
The main cause of
water
pollution
 in my opinion is human activity related to manufacturing. There are a lot of factories
especially
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 in developing countries that make
huge
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a huge
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 impact
in
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on
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water
pollution
. Chemical waste from
oil making
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oil-making
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 factories contributes
big
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 portion of
water
pollution
. Another source of
pollution
 is oil leaking from oil tankers.
Water
pollution
 is causing serious environmental damage,
such
 as killing humans and animals across the world and even causing damage to forests. In terms of human
health
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 clear
water
 is essential,
therefore
 polluted
water
 can cause health complications
such
 as cancer, cardiovascular diseases and colon diseases. We can’t live without clean
water
 so we must protect our lakes and rivers from
pollution
. The government must regulate environmental damage coming from large companies and businesses, we need to make a step forward towards green energy and
economy
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. I think recycling
of
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plastic and driving electric cars can drastically decrease
amount
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the amount
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 of
water
pollution
 we are making.
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