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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given two plans compare the facilities and changes settled at
the
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Grande Park, specifically on Arnold Avenue part of it
on
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 1920 and today. It can be clearly seen that there are significant conversions
happened
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on
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 the main avenue area.
On the other hand
, some main functionalities remained stable as it was. The most remarkable additions are Amphitheatre for musical events and
rose
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 garden which
built
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 in the free space
that
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gained
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 by removing
old
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 stage and fountain which was in the middle of the saloon.
Also
, on the
southern
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 east of
venue
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the venue
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,
water
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a water
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 feature was installed
instead
 of
glasshouse
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the glasshouse
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. Some of the seats which were
sticked
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 to the interior walls were removed to make free space.
Moreover
, towards
to
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the northeast of the
avanue
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avenue
,
rose
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a rose
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 garden and pond area were converted to
café
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a café
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 and activity
area
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 for kids, respectively.
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, there are very few unchanged parts still
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 on the venue. These can be classified as entrances positioned
both
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 north and south gates.
In addition
this
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, the other rose garden which was at
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the north-west
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north-west
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northwest
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 corner still can be seen on the current layout of Grange Park.
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  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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