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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the amount of money earned from exporting
products
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 in 5 categories of one country between 2015 and 2016.
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 the table gives information about the change rate of each category's export in the years 2015 and 2016.
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, all categories increased except for precious stones and jewellery. The top two exports, which were oil-based goods and engineered
products
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, had similar sales volumes. Petroleum
products
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 increased slightly by 3% from $60
billion
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 in 2015 to about $63
billion
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 in 2016. Engineered goods had a fast increase rate of 8.5% from roughly $58
billion
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 in 2015 to approximately $61
billion
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 in 2016. The other three categories had much lower export values. Gems and jewellery recorded the only decline with sales of about $2
billion
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 in 2015 declining by about 5% in 2016. Farming
products
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 were $30
billion
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 in 2015 and had only a slight increase of 0.81%. The greatest increase of over 15% was from textiles, which increased from approximately $25
billion
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 to over $30
billion
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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