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Living in a country where you have to speak foreign language can cause serious social and practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#country #language
Today’s world suffers from
a
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mass migration
due to
 war, hunger, social unrest, unemployment and other various reason. The
language
 barrier is one of the biggest challenges immigrants face and sometimes it can be a real stumble block for their education, career and assimilation.
Firstly
, with a lack of
language
 skills, immigrants have a hard time adapting to the local culture and customs.
As a result
, they fail to realize the regulations and social unwritten rules, which can lead to confusion, discrimination, and sometimes racism and violent reaction. Authorities
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 some countries are desperately trying to involve immigrants in society
through
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 giving employment and free tuition, without previously giving
language
 classes and educating
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 social norms.
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 addition, it is undeniable that not knowing the local
language
 can cause a lot of daily life problems.
For instance
, in many
countries
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 English is not in demand, and a person has to explain themselves to locals, whether it is a clerk or
a policemen
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, only in the local speech. Supposing that your life is at stake, the chances to end up being safe are horribly low, as you will probably fail to communicate some important information. Fortunately, with the advancement in technology, we can reduce
misunderstanding
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 using various devices and apps.
However
, in my opinion, those are not the things you can rely on
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 and can be a source of even more
troubles
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. In conclusion, I believe that decision to relocate to
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 foreign country cannot go without
firstly
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 studying the
language
 of your destination.
Besides
, starting a new life
with
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 immersing in
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 new
language
 and culture can be so exciting and fun.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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