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It is the government’s responsibility to save people from themselves, for example by banning smoking or enforcing helmet use for motorcyclists. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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While
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 many
people
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 believe that it should be the responsibility of the
Government
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 authorities to completely ban smoking items
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and
 enforce citizens to wear helmets to save their lives. I completely agree with the fact that these things are important but
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 based on individual thinking
however
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government
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 must play a significant role to impose laws on citizens. First and foremost, most youngsters frequently smoke in their daily routine just for fashion, it will directly impact their health and causes several long-term diseases
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 as lung cancer, breathing problems and many more.
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,
one
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 of my friends smoked different types of cigarettes every day.
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, he got blood cancer which was difficult for their family members to take him. It would be more appropriate to ban smoking items on a permanent basis so that we can save the lives of millions of
people
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.
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, it
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 reduces the burden on the
government
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 healthcare system.
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, safety is
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 of the most important things in human
life
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 and thousands of motorcyclists travel each day from homes to offices and vice versa.
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 of the major examples of wearing a
helmet
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 is to ensure 100% protection of each biker from accidents.
One
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 of the teachers happily safe his
life
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 during a road accident because he was wearing a good-quality
helmet
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.
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, it depends on person to person whether he wears a
helmet
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 or not. If he wears a
helmet
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, he can easily save the
life
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 of him and more
people
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.
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, it would be extremely helpful if the
government
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 takes serious action against smokers and motorcyclists and enforce them to follow the rules
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 if they do not obey the regulation, the
government
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 must impose a heavy penalty on them.
As a result
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, we can easily save the
life
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 millions of
people
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