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The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the increasing population of the city, many companies set almost the same commute
time
.
Therefore
, it could cause the problem of
traffic
 jams. I do not agree that the best way for governments to solve
traffic
 congestion is to provide free public
transport
 every
time
. I think providing free public
transport
 all day has some disadvantages.
First,
it could cause a waste of resources. Since congestion is unlikely to occur often throughout the day, it almost happens at particular times when
people
 usually go to work in the morning and go off work in the afternoon.
Hence
, there are not many
people
 who take public
transport
 at other times.
Second,
offering a free ticket cannot attract more
people
 to take public
transport
. If taking a bus or a subway to somewhere costs more
time
 than taking a car, many
people
 may choose to take a car because current
people
 first want to choose convenience and they do not want to spend much
time
 on the way.
On the other hand
, if the government provides free tickets for public
transport
, it could reduce the volume of
traffic
 on the roads sometimes and
people
 may spend less
time
 going to work. And it could reduce carbon emissions when more
people
 choose public
transport
 to go to the company. In conclusion, providing free public
transport
 is not necessarily the best way to solve the
traffic
 congestion problem. But it
also
 has some advantages.
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task response
The essay provides a reasonable level of task response, presenting both the advantages and disadvantages of providing free public transport. However, it could benefit from a more in-depth analysis of the issue, including alternative solutions.
coherence and cohesion
The essay demonstrates a satisfactory level of coherence and cohesion, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. However, to improve, the essay could make better use of linking words and phrases to enhance the logical flow of ideas.

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