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The two below chart illustrate the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation between 1918 and 2011 in both England and Wales

The two below chart illustrate the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation between 1918 and 2011 in both England and Wales
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The two below
chart
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 illustrate the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation between 1918 and 2011 in both England and Wales.
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, the proportions have varied over the years between the rental and owned houses. From the
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 we can infer that
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 owned accommodation was in 1918 by approximately 80%.
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valued
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 fluctuated over the years to reach
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near around 30% in 2001 before it raised above 35% in 2011.
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 , the proportions of
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rented houses started at
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 level in 1918
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higher than 20% and gradually increased over the years to reach a peak in 2001
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 approximately 70% It is worth
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 that the two values were equal in 1971 by 50%, and
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 was the only time that both values has the same percentage. In a summary, we can note significantly that
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most people tend to rent the accommodation rather than buy and own it.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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