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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as prctical problems, to what extent do you agree or disgree with this statement?

#country #language #disgree
There are
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several challenges for any
person
 who is willing to live in a foreign
country
. One of those challenges is the
language
 barrier, in my opinion, if anyone ignores learning the
language
 of the
country
 he is living in, he will face many problems in both practical and social situations. Some people believe that it is not necessary to speak or learn the
language
 of the
country
 you
are
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work or live in, they claim that using an intermediate
language
 like English or using a social app translator can finalize and solve basic life situations.
On the other hand
, there are several opinions against what has
mentioned
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 above. Any
person
 can face multiple issues in case of ignorance
learning
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 the
language
 of the
country
 he transfers to. Maybe
for example
 he cannot be able to buy his daily needs as he cannot speak or express what he needs,
furthermore
 learning a
language
 will enable any
person
 to understand the customs and traditions of the
country
 he is living in. In many countries you can’t get the nationality or even bring your family if you are not able to speak the native
language
 of
this
country
,
for example
 in Germany they request a B1 level to get the nationality after spending at least 5 working years in the
country
.
Nevertheless
, to deal with governmental sectors you should be able to speak and express your request in a clear
language
 so you avoid any practical issue that might be happened
due to
 any wrong expression. To sum it up, learning a foreign
language
 is not easy but it will release and remove a heavy burden from the
person
 who is willing to live in a different community.
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