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Nowadays culture is much the same all around the world when compared to previous times. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

#culture #world #times #development
Culture
 is one of the
thing
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 that diversify
people
 from each other.
However
, most
people
 argue that
,
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 these days ,
culture
 in every region seems to be similar ,
comparing
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 to the past. From my perspective, I believe that the negative consequences outweigh the positive
due to
 several reasons. Regarding one of the negative effects,
culture
 is able to shape the society and
people
 in each
countries
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country
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. If
people
 trust and do the same things, citizens may not have distinction and diversity in society. The new
culture
 will not create and grow like a branch of
tree
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a tree
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.
For example
, if
people
 in Europe and Asia do the same manners and duties,
this
 shall be less interesting for
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a human
the human
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human
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humans
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 to learn
the a
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a
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 new
culture
.
Consequently
, it
also
 affects the tourism industry since
people
 may not have any
differentiate
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 things to discover.
Furthermore
, another possible drawback is that the kids may not know and
familiar
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be familiar
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 with the origin of their region. As if children act in common
as
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 others, how could they know the real
culture
 of their ancestors
.
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In addition
,
this
 leads to
the
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future problems. When they grow up, they will not expand the cultures since they do not familiar with
it
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them
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, and
this
 will definitely prohibit the spreading of the previous
culture
 and stop
in
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apply
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development. In conclusion, I
tends
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 to support the disadvantages development side, as it
havedemolish
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have demolish
 the distinction and diversity of
people
,
also
, it
stop
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 the spreading of
culture
 in the future. The diversity of
people
make
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people
valueable
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valuable
 and interesting.
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