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Band 4

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is?

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 since the fact that congestion is caused by controversial factors. I believe that using public transport by the citizens more frequently
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 would have a positive impact on the roads' hecticness. All
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 since the fact that congestion is caused by controversial factors. I believe that using public transport by the citizens more frequently
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 would have a positive impact on the roads' hecticness.
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, if the government make an effort to improve
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 system,
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 the jams issue will not be so urgent. 2) Summarizing both viewpoints' arguments, alcoholism was a major issue throughout
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times,
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 unemployment, early deaths, serious health diseases and etc. I am a strong advocate of a restricting system
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personal forming. If
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society. 3) All
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only true viewpoint and online currencies have both advantages and disadvantages. I believe that
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 outweigh the benefits since the fact that people frequently fail in forecasting the valuta's raises and
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decreases
increases
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 giving the opportunity (4:43 min) of monopolizing the market by the narrow individuals' circle. If governments continue not
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online currencies as nowadays it will have a
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 effect
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 a far perspective. 4) Summarizing all the arguments, I am in favour of the
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 that helping with the housework has a major impact on the children's world perceiving. I believe that it helps to educate independence which will be very
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convenience
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 young age learn how to do
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 that will be useful for their own
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. If they do not do anything except
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entertaining
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 deals,
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adoptation
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adoption
 to the adult being will be very complicated.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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